I went back and did a thorough spell and punctuation check, and fixed some run on sentences, also paragraphs were too long. One person pointed out tha... I was being unrealistic on how long I was having my character hit a golf ball, the story was a fantasy but hey he was right about it being unrealistic, and he had brought it up politely so no reason not to make a change. After making those corrections I reposted the story awaiting further comments and hoping for a few compliments.There were some. Emily escorted her out to a waiting SUV, smartly opening the door for Emma to enter. Immediately, Emma’s eyes zeroed in on a plain manila envelope on the seat next to her. ‘What’s this?’ She asked Emily as she got into the driver’s seat. ‘Instructions.’ Instructions? Emma carefully opened the envelope as Emily drove them clear of LAX. Emma, Hello! I thought you needed a little entertainment so I arranged something for you. I hope you don’t mind. Your driver will have more details. Love, . . In some ways looking at the star map we have mostly a half-sphere extending away from the direction of the Sa'arm advance with the greatest concentration of the advance in somewhat of a cone. Atlantis-at is somewhere near the center of the cone but a great distance from the point (which is Earth) of origin. Sure there are specks like Wadi along the front of the Sa'arm advance, but for the most part we look like we're fleeing a great disaster.That we're fleeing a disaster is true. What we're. Darlene gave me a warm hug and a glass of ice-cold water and sat with me. I don't know which I appreciated more; her company, the hug, or the beverage. I guzzled the water down in one long gulp. Public speaking is lonely and thirsty work.The sisters stopped by in ones and twos to exchange small talk with Sheila before retiring for the evening. That was the cover story, at least. I noticed after the third such “visit” that most of the women seemed to spend more time sneaking glances at my naked.