It's between a pucker and a smirk and I think she knows it drives me insane."He called you?" I sat there dumbfounded. Why would Buzz Summers call Beck...? "Does he need help with homework or something? He's a senior." I know he's a senior and I know he plays quarterback. I just wondered if you know him, that's all," she said, dismissively."What did he want?" I was getting irritated with how she was rationing little bits of information. She was doing that thing with her lips again, and giving me. It looks nice on you." She slightly narrowed her eyes. "My bra or my cleavage?" Ok I think she has some idea of where this is going, I thought. Only a cynical woman like her could figure that out. Since Sonia decoded what I was up to, I decided to be honest with her. "Both actually." The young woman's voice became unsteady. "Yes, I know. I've seen the way you looked at me in class. You think I'm not watching? A few seconds ago, I saw that same look on your face when I was going to try on. It was rather like an out of body experience I suppose. The reality of the situation that I was a man in bed with a woman was wholly insufficient to arouse me.What a lie I was living with her.Now this new reality is finally here and I am that woman having my cheeks kissed by my loving man. I am that woman who has to allow her breasts and nipples to be fondled and bitten by a man who only sees me as a beautiful creature made for his ultimate pleasure. Then at the end I?m also the woman who. I was already a bit dejected. I’d put my heart into this story. Toughen up, old man.“Okay. Let’s start with the story arc. I think you could begin with something more dramatic that draws the reader into the story more rapidly. It’s the third page before we have a clue that they are boarding a spaceship. Lead with it. Even a simple a sentence of thought from the main character that said, ‘I took one last look at the earth before I boarded for my journey to the stars.’ Something that immediately.