So, though the 3 stages of changes were still there, I didn'tplay it up after the first few.I don't know that I'll ever write another story, but I wou...d love to haveyour feedback about the overall story, plot, writing style, etc. if youwill offer it. I feel like my writing got better as I went, but knowthat it needs work. I am tempted to go back and clean up the firstseveral parts; would love to know if you think it worthwhile. Would thestory have benefited from a photo based SWI? . “I can explain,” she said sheepishly.“There is nothing to explain!” I responded. “It is obvious that you have just had an orgasm! The glow on your face is just like your sisters!”Sit back down and relax!” I said turning towards the TV hoping that my raging hard-on was not obvious. However I was sure she was too flustered to notice.I picked up the cover of the DVD and read, “ ‘Holiday Fun. Solo, Girl/Girl and Threesome Action!’ If you think it’s any good I should get c a copy.“Anyway we won’t be. She gave up the fingering and grabbed the dildo, made sure it was lubed and then starting tracing circles around my ass with its tip, each circle getting smaller until she was ready to slip it in. From the position I was in I was able to see what she was doing as well as look at her tits and that look of pure sex had taken her over. She looked up at me and asked if I was ready, but before I could reply she had plunged it into me...oh, fuck that hurt briefly, she now was watching only the dildo. "I'd suggest that you don't let on to the customers about Louise or Al, or if you do, be real casual about it. Remember that your customers are there to have a good time and to see the Canyon, so try to not let your being down affect them." Good advice, Michelle," Crystal agreed. "In fact, I'll put it this way. Tomorrow morning is our time to be bummed out wishing that Al and Louise were both with us. But when the customer bus gets in, the bum-out ends. What both Al and Louise would want us to.