I can only make one small criticism, a very minor one really but one that didn't seem right for the period. At one point you wrote. 'At 9:30 she appro...ched me'. I think that is a modern way of saying the time. Emily more likely would have said, 'At half nine or half past nine.' Just a minor point but as I'm doing Creative Writing too, I thought I should point it out just in case you decide to submit it as a piece of coursework." He grinned and I did too and wondered at the care with which he'd. Well-endowed. I'm still a virgin and I'm scared it's going to hurt." "That's understandable. I was the same way before I lost my virginity." Whitney comforted me. We continued to talk and drink until about 4 in the morning when I finally decided I had had a little too much and needed to sleep it off. Whitney and I crawl into the guest bedroom's queen size bed. As we lay down next to each other, I start to feel queasy from all the alcohol. Whitney offers to rub my stomach. "How does that feel?". Accordingly she asked if I could get away for a weekend at her family home in the Southern Highlands. She would be inviting some of the guests I had already met and entertained, along with some locals she had known for years. This would be both a farewell party for her, and a celebration of my subservience. She gave no other details, but my expectations were high, knowing how much I had loved the two years of our relationship. I think I counted down the minutes until the weekend arrived.I had. It is short for Svetlana. I speak seven languages. I grew up in the Ukraine. Or it was the Ukraine. Now, I don’t know what it is. My family is dead. Friends tell me not to come back. They say I will also be killed. No nation wanted me. Fats took me in when I fled the cruise liner. They were going to send me back when we made port in Miami. They said I had to go back because my Visa was going to expire. So I chose here.I sat there stunned. I do not remember what I thought had.