I have been working on this novel in my spare time over the past year. I am looking for feedback as to the following: -Do the characters grab you? -D... you care what happens to the characters? -Does this story grab you? -Now that you have read the first chapter, do you want to read more? -Do you think this piece needs to be thrown in the trash heap and burned? -Other suggestions are welcome I thank those of you who take the time to provide constructive feedback with details. If you just tell me. His bronze skin shining from the morning sun as it cascades through the window. He opens the bathroom door. The steam shower hides me from his view. The music playing on the radio masks his presence.A burst of cool air on my body is my only warning before his hands go around my waist, pulling me close for a deep kiss.His cock is hard as he presses against my pussy. "Baby, you smell wonderful." He growls into my ear. My nipples harden even more. I shiver in anticipation for what's to come. His. The guy used to be a Navy Seal in Nam. Gary explained that we had a small 'Special Ops' exercise tonight aimed at 'behavior modification.' The guy is on our side, and he assured Gary that the motel would be most cooperative to our efforts. He didn't even ask why we were doing our little raid. He just wanted to see justice done in a relatively peaceful way by and for fellow Ops men." That's great, but can he help us and not lose his job?" Well, he didn't think anything was a problem. He rented. But there were no such times in the orphanage, where he spent his adolesance. the beatings there had been frightful, and not just from the matron, but the other children too had beaten him and took all of his possesions before the end of the first day he had more bruises than he had ever got from his parents, and nothing at all to his name.After this he had made his way as a day labourer, hard hours and little pay, had just about enough money to hold a small plot of land on which he built a.