I found this very strange too, because not that many people have a bathroom in their garage, and the door to it had been closed when we pulled into th... garage. I took note of all this, but didn't make a comment about how she knew about the bathroom being there either.Once she came out of the bathroom I went up the stairs to my living room level and unlocked the door. Danny was sitting in my kitchen, drinking coffee and looking extremely hung over."Hey, Delilah, how come you're here?" Katie sent. We started walking over to the Weems house at 6:00. I was relieved to notice a state trooper parked outside their gate. He waved us through and we started walking down the long driveway, lined with palm trees. I looked around at the well-manicured lawns; there was supposed to be a tennis court somewhere.After a few minutes we reached the main house, a giant marble and sandstone monument to the Weems family fortune. Bill Weems had been a billionaire real-estate developer before going into. "Hi, Mark." Sarah? For real? This better not be some kinda prank. John, you know how long I've imagined her on the grill." It's no prank. I've always wanted to be meat. Especially for you." Alright," John interrupts, "lets go to the den and get started."The den has a large makeshift grill made from concrete blocks and mesh wire, full of coals. A couch sits facing this grill pit. The ceiling slopes up with the roof. On the tallest wall is a fireplace that has an extra grate near the top to vent. This story is not the first I have written, however it is the first I've felt comfortable enough in it's quality to publish online. As such, there is a task I'm asking you to complete. Tell me what you think. The more specific the better, obviously, but even a simple, "It's good", or "It sucked" is better than no feedback at all. Point out any errors I might have missed in spelling, and be the best grammar Nazi you can be. I believe in you, and you just need to believe in your ability to point.
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